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Hero Myth of Spartanamiess

Long long ago there was a boy named Spartanamiess he was 4 years old when his mom was taken away from him by an especial fantastic hobgoblin who was much different than the rest of his kind. The hobgoblin was one of a kind his skin was like no other. No normal weapon could penitrate his amazing skin. He took Spartanamiess mother to a cave in Ethiopia were he held her captive for sixteen years. In those many years the hobgoblin made her marry him. What the hobgoblin did not know was that she had already had a son that was said to be very strong and brave when he got older. His whole life when he was younger he thought he was an orphan. As Spartanamiess was getting older he found out that he was not an orphan and that his mother was taken when he was a young boy. When he found out about this he was around thirteen or fourteen years old he wanted to go out and find his mother right when he found out but one of his care takers told him that he would not be strong enough to kill the hobgoblin. So from that day he started training day and night so one day he would be able to bring his mother home again. His mother was said to be one of the most beautiful girls alive in the world and his father was a god but they did not know which of the gods was the father. For that reason it was said that Spartanamiess would be strong and brave and help others as a hero should. For that reason also his mother was given a power from the god that she would not age but yet she still was not imortal. Six years past and he was around 19 and his training had paid off he was now a strong brave man that was yet still kind and helpfull but not scared of anyone or anything. He asked everyone that knew anything about his mother and found out she was taken to Ethiopia. It would be a long hard journey to get to Ethiopia. There were many people that voulanterd to go with him because of his bravery, leadership, and kidness. He thanked everybody that wanted to help but apoligized and said he did not want to hurt anyone else that was not part of this and also because this was his fight and he had to do this alone. People also asked him if they can build him a sturdy ship to re-pay him for all the things he did for them he let them do this and tried to pay them but no one accepted any money. He started his long journey, people had said it would take him about a year to get to ethiopia which would make him 21 when he got there, but with the ship that was built for him he was determand to make the trip shorter. As he traveled he trained hard with his sord but what he did not know yet was that his sord would do him no good againsted the hobgoblin. One night as he was traveling a storm was about to hit he felt it coming but did not think it would be to strong or make a diffrence so he did not pay much attention to it. As he woke up the boat was rocking like crazy. He ran to the deck and was overwelmed with a big sea storm. The storm was throwing him around, he needed help but no one was around to lend a hand. The strong rocking of the boat kept him from being able to reach the sales. He was struggling to stay on board when poiseidon, god of the sea rised up and saw Spartanamiess struggling to keep his boat upright. He noticed he was alone and came to his rescue. He raised his trident and comanded the sea to stop its terrior on Spartanamiess. The sea calmed down and Spartanmiess thanked Poiseidon a great deal for saving his life from the dreadful storm. The rest of the journey was much esier. When he arrived to Ethiopia he found Apollo coming down with a golden bow and one arrow. He thanked him for it but told him he might not even need it because he did not know yet of the hobgoblins power. He also showed him the way to go and where to find the cave. When he arrived to the cave he found his mother standing there. He came up to her and she knew who he was right away she gave him a hug as the hobgolin walked in to the cave. The hobgoblin was was very angry, he asked her what this man was doing here. She said this is my son and he has come to bring me back. The hobgoblin laghed and Spartanamiess pulled out his sord. He ran toward the goblin and kicked him to the floor. The goblin laughed again Spartanaiess tried to stab him with his sword but the sword bent because of the hobgoblins power. Spartanamiess was surrprised and angry, he remmemberd the arrow that Apollo gave to him he pulled it out. The presure was on he had one shot to get it right if he missed he and his mother would be finished. He aimed the bow and arrow, and took his shot. Direct hit right between the eyes, the hobgoblin fell to his knees and his last words were, "nice shot". So Spartanamiess grabbed his mother and sped off back to his boat were he set sail back to there country. While riding back his mother told him the whole story and how long she was waiting for this day. When they got back everyone was amazed and didnt know how on earth he was able to kill the goblin and bring his mother back. They spent the rest of there lives in happenies and Spartanamiess kept helping people as he did before.

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The Birmingham Courier

September 15, 1963"The Sixteenth Street Baptist Church Tragedy." At 9 A.M. this morning at the Sixteenth Street Baptist Church there were around 80 teenage African American girls standing around in the lobby before Sunday school. It was a chilly morning today in the summer, low 60's. The instructor of the Sunday school class was a middle aged women named Ella C. Demand. The main idea and point of her class was to teach "love and forgiveness". Almost all of the girls in the class knew each other and were friends. They even attended the same church service. Several girls at the church said the day seemed like any other Sunday. Except at 10:22 A.M. it wasn't such a normal day at church, a huge explosion shook the Baptist church down to its foundation. If you were anywhere near the big explosion, the noise was deafening. One of the classroom walls collapsed as several young girls ran for their lives screaming in terror. Most of the people in the church still did not know where the explosion had occured at that point. There were many wounded. As of right now a reported four deaths and still some missing. Law enforcment are still investigating the bombing and have said they have suspects. However, they are not releasing any names at this point. It was a heart breaking day in Birmingham, now known as "Bombingham" Alabama where most are still shocked!